Ahsas

Poet: Kinza
By: Kinza, Karachi

Kabhi joh ahsaas ho tum ko
k tum acha nahi kartey
joh mujh ko yun satatey ho
lahoo mera jalatey ho
agar is agg me jal k main ek din khak ho jaoun
mujhe dil se mita dena
samandar me baha dena
magar yeh yaad rakhna tum
khuda se ek dua karna..
k jisey tum zindagi me agey chaho wo tum jaisa na hargiz ho..

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31 Oct, 2007

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Reviews & Comments

Your thoughts are superb.
only problem is with the balance, I have edited first and last verses for you.
Please try as follows;
Kabhi ahsaas ho tum ko
k tum acha nahi kartey
joh mujh ko yun satatey ho
lahoo mera jalatey ho
agar is agg me jal k main ek din khak ho jaoun
mujhe dil se mita dena
samandar me baha dena
magar yeh yaad rakhna tum
khuda se ek dua karna..
jisay tum is tarah chaho,
woh tum jaisa kabhi na ho.....

By: ali, lahore on Mar, 06 2014

very ordinary lines.... whats so great about it.....

By: Amaan JAved , delhi on May, 28 2013

hum apni poetry kese bhej sakhte hai plz help me ?

By: shaista, guddu on Dec, 27 2011

Bht ache

By: M.saeed, Swl on Nov, 29 2011

DEAR, VERY NICE POET YOU ARE.
KEEP YOUR MOMENTUM UP...

By: azhar, UK Glasgow on Nov, 05 2010

Dear Kinza Assalamu alekum,
ap bhout achchi shair hain MashAllah bhout khoob bayan kiya ahi apne apne alfazoo me "Ahsas" ko............... Lekin my dear Ahsas hamesha bura nhi hota achcha waqt sunhaere lamahat Ahsas ka ek alag pehloo hin...................


Unke aane ka jo pegam sab laii hain,
Mere dil ki her ek kali muskuraii hain,
Unki ankho mein mene apni tasweer paii hain,
Main shrma gaii !!!!!!!!!! hay mein shrma gaii,
Jab apne saaye me unki perchaii paii huii....... :)
Apke jawab ki muntakib
Seema Abbas Yani

By: seema, Moradabad (India) on Oct, 27 2010

nice keep it up

By: kuki, isb on Oct, 09 2010

ya bohat achi hai
ap aise hi liktay raho
thats good

By: hina, karachi on Sep, 16 2009

very nice,really,
main ny apki poetry aaj parhi hai,keep it up.

By: Shabana, china on Jul, 02 2009

اس میں کچھ کمی ہے مزید اچھا کرنے کی ضرورت ہے۔

By: M. Aumir, Chichawatni Sahiwal on Jan, 05 2009

boht khobsort
ache share he hemasha dil ko chote ha or ap ke share dil ko cho lane wale ha. marbolus

By: zeeshan tufail, quetta on Aug, 17 2008

Nice

By: abbas, karachi on Jun, 14 2008

agar ap es shair ko urdu main likhteen too behtar tha.nice

By: arslan, quetta on Jun, 05 2008

sir kia hi baat hai bhut khoob

By: Danish Ali, karachi on May, 28 2008

ap ki poetry bohat achi he , ap ne ahsas ko achi tarah defind kya he. ap mohsan naqvi prha kro

By: ahmad, punjabian, lahore on May, 17 2008

dear ur poetry is soo soo nice i think u hide a greast poet in ur inner side plz show that i pray for God u prove ur self

By: Asher , Lahore on May, 13 2008

Very Very Nice.
Like that

By: Jawad Saleem, Lahore on May, 06 2008

Kya Sheikh Ki Khushk Zindagani
Guzri

Bechaari Ki Ek Shab Na Suhaani Guzri



Dozak K Takhayyul Mein Burhaapa Guzra

Janat Ki Duaaoo Mein Jawaani Guzri


By: Mahil Rizvi, Lahore on Apr, 25 2008

Hum To Muhabat Main Toheed Ke Kail Hain Faraz

Aik Hi Shaks Ko Mehboob Banaye Rakha


awesome peotry



By: ali, hyderabad on Apr, 15 2008

Salam, Good effort Keep the ball rolling..
bus kuch Lafzoon ki Hair Phair ki Zarurat hai..
But great effort..!!!!

By: FARAZ, Karachi on Apr, 10 2008

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